Thursday, 9 June 2016

Will He Save Her

Walt: write a narrative that is descriptive (paints a picture in the reader's mind)

Bam Bam!!!One day a little boy and his friends went to the beach.There name’s were Timmy Jack and Mat.The beach they went to was Mike Marilyn beach.Timmy Ran in first then jack then mat.Mat doesn't really like going into the beach water but he have to so he just ran in.Then Timmy thought he was a good swimmer but the surf water took him and he started to drown.Then Jack and Mat was worried about timmy because they couldn't see him around.Suddenly They heard someone saying HELP HELP.Then They listened one more time then they knew it was Timmy.But they couldn't do anything to help because he was out far and probably he will drown said Mat.The Mat and Jack heard nothing but just the water moving around.Then some how a hero out of the sky dived through the water.He grabbed Timmy and Took him back on to the beach.Then they said thank you Superhero then Hyperwave said That's All right that's my job to save people and partic the world.Then Timmy woke up and he said thank you very much Mr.Then he said no worry.Then he left and that's the end of my story.

1 comment:

  1. Tom, you have a nice draft to a story here. However, I am not sure you put forth your best effort to complete the assignment, and I am not sure you have used the picture that was given to you in class. Please be sure to use your time wisely in the future.